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Book on the Bedside Table by ~dancinggirl53193:icondancinggirl53193:



          You are the book that lives on my bedside table. My favorite one, the spine worn thin by all the times my fingers have traced those pages. That one, there, under the glasses. No, the other side of the phone. Yeah, that one.
          Sometimes you get a little buried, but there's only so much room on that table. So maybe my watch gets laid across you, then the notes for that paper I need to write. Maybe some textbooks and that waltz CD I love. But when the teetering pile of all life's little cares slips, bruising my heart, I hear the crash of the textbooks tumbling to the floor and I toss my watch aside, wanting only to curl up with you, to be comforted by the familiar smell of the old pages, to escape.

And you're always there.

That's why you're my favorite.
:icondancinggirl53193:

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Here I am, squeaking in at the last moment for the writers-workshop workshop on extended metaphor [link] . Hope you enjoy!
Critique encouraged!

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:iconcycob:
ohhhhh woowwwwwwwwwwwww

:D

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:iconmethylated-spirit:
beautiful :heart:
very natural, sweet piece.

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:iconshycraft:
D'awww. The vagaries of a sweet relationship.
:iconstormywolf:
I think I would have continued using the same language throughout for description: "You are the book," followed by, "It's my favorite," detracted from the intimate mood that I think you were going for.
:iconnicktroptopolis:
I agree with the comment about switching between "You" and "it" being a little uneven, but as a whole I really like it.
Both concepts are very familiar :)

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:iconkira73:
Very sweet. I wouldn't mind being someone's favorite book. Unless it was a book on tax law or something.

Of course, being the book that's shoved between the mattresses or stuffed under the bathroom sink isn't a bad deal either. :XD:

This is a fun piece. Much lighter than many of the one's I've read so far.

Well done.

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~Pararoms and romanticas~

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:icondancinggirl53193:
You're quite right - I'll try changing that. Thanks for the feedback!

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